Conciseness

Information about Conciseness

Published on April 5, 2013

Author: tccampa

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Just too much:: Just too much: Avoiding Wordiness in Writing Click for next  Effective writing: Effective writing Effective writing is concise, with no unnecessary words. Effective writing is NOT WORDY . Click for next  Effective writing: Effective writing The term “ wordy ” refers to writing with unnecessary words . Click for next  Wordy = too much: Wordy = too much Wordy writing is like wearing too much, trying a little too hard Click for next  PowerPoint Presentation: Wordy writing takes too long to reach the point. Click for next  How to be really, really wordy : How to be really, really wordy You too can write badly!!! Bore your readers!! Click for next  Seriously….(a disclaimer): Seriously …. (a disclaimer) You do not want to create wordy writing…you want to be concise . The “ Steps ” in this presentation are used humorously …look for the word “ seriously ” after each step to find serious writing advice. Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #1 ... Dull, wordy writing uses the following: I think that I believe that I feel that In my opinion It is my belief that It is my opinion that Click for next  You already own it!: You already own it! Seriously , never use “I think” “I feel” “I believe” “In my opinion” in your writing. Click for next  You already own it!: You already own it! If your name is on the paper, readers know to expect your thoughts, opinions, and ideas. I think cats make the worst pets. ( wordy ) Cats make the worst pets. (concise) In my opinion , caller I.D. is an invasion of privacy. ( wordy ) Caller I.D. is an invasion of privacy. (concise) Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #2 … Bore readers with wishy-washy & useless adjectives Click for next  Wishy-washy adjectives: Wishy-washy adjectives kind of sort of type of specific really basically OK, Seriously … don’t be wishy-washy Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Wishy-washy My mood generally depends on certain factors that are actually related to the type of foods I eat. Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Better (concise) My mood depends upon what I eat . Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Wishy-washy: Any particular type of dessert is fine with me . Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Better (concise) Any dessert is fine with me. Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Wishy-washy -Balancing the budget by Friday is impossible without some kind of extra help . Click for next  Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives: Eliminate wishy-washy adjectives Better (concise) -- Balancing the budget by Friday is impossible without extra help. Click for next  Wishy-washy words : Wishy-washy words kind of sort of type of really basically particular definitely actually generally individual Guaranteed to bore your readers! Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #3 … If one word is good , then LOTS of words must be better, right? Click for next  Extra words!!!: Extra words!!! Seriously… Like make-up, certain words enhance your writing . But too many words can be ugly. Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Look for prepositions to eliminate . to with of Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Look for prepositions to eliminate . Wordy An employee with ambition ... More Concise An ambitious employee… Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Wordy The decision of the judge will be final. More Concise The judge’s decision will be final. Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Wordy I met with a friend of mine at the door of his office . More Concise I met my friend at his office door . Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Use who which that sparingly Extra is not always good. Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Wordy The report, which was published recently ... More Concise The recently published report… Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Change phrases into single words Wordy All applicants who are interested in the job must... More Concise All interested job applicants must… Click for next  Change phrases into single words : due to the fact that because of the fact that the reason why is that given the fact that because Change phrases into single words = Click for next  Change phrases into single words : Wordy Concise Change phrases into single words Click for next  At this/that point in time... As you requested, In accordance with your request... Now/then Change phrases into single words : Wordy Concise Change phrases into single words Click for next  He is a man who... can has the ability to… he Change phrases into single words : Wordy Concise Change phrases into single words Click for next  in spite of the fact that thinks/ believes be of the opinion that although the question as to whether whether Change phrases into single words : Wordy Concise Change phrases into single words Click for next  put forth an effort disappear / vanish disappear from view try / attempt How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #4 … Weaken your sentences with expletives There were It was There are It is Click for next  Avoid expletives: Avoid expletives Expletives are phrases using It + be-verb or there + be-verb . AVOID: It is It was There is There was Click for next  Avoid expletives: Avoid expletives Seriously… Instead of using expletives , begin sentences with a NOUN and VERB . Noun Verb Click for next  Avoid expletives: Avoid expletives Wordy It is important that we find a solution . Concise We must find a solution . It is Click for next  Avoid expletives: Avoid expletives Wordy There are four rules that should be observed... Concise Four rules should be observed:... There are Click for next  Avoid expletives: Avoid expletives Wordy There was a big explosion which shook the windows, and there were many people running into the street. Concise A big explosion shook the windows, and people ran into the street. Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #5 … Let your verbs be passive and lazy Click for next  Verbs should be active! : Verbs should be active ! Seriously… Verbs should show ACTION . Avoid passive verbs when possible. Click for next  Active Verbs: Active Verbs In sentences with active verbs , the subject performs the action expressed in the verb. The cat ate the goldfish . Scientists presented the report . Click for next  Passive Verbs: Passive Verbs In sentences with passive verbs , the verbs are weaker because the object receives the action . The goldfish was eaten by the cat. The report was presented by scientists . Click for next  Verbs should be active! : Verbs should be active ! ACTIVE VERB --- ate PASSIVE VERB --- was eaten by The teachers ate the cake. The cake was eaten by the teachers. Click for next  Verbs should be active! : Verbs should be active ! Wordy (passive verb) An account was opened by Mrs. Simms. More Concise (active verb) Mrs. Simms opened an account . Click for next  Use active rather than passive verbs : Use active rather than passive verbs Wordy (passive verb) Many errors were corrected by the student. More Concise (active verb) The student corrected many errors. Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #7 … Be redundant and repeat the same ideas over and over and over… Click for next  Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy Seriously… Redundancy is unnecessary repetition . Redundant expressions make writing longer , not better. Click for next  Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy Eliminate expressions that add nothing to what has already been said. Click for next  Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy past memories (memories are always in the past) Absolutely certain (certain is already absolute ) Click for next  I remember the future! You’re going to eat me? Are you certain ? Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy basic fundamentals (basic = fundamental ) true facts (facts are already true) Click for next  Basic Fundamental Math Basic Fundamental Math For students who need something simpler than basic . We want true facts, not false ones. Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy future plans (plans are always made for the future) terrible tragedy (a tragedy is already terrible) Click for next  This is terrible! I’d like a fun tragedy once in a while! Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy end result (results come at the end ) final outcome (outcome is final ) I want results at the beginning ! Click for next  I’m here with the mid- outcome , for those who can’t wait for the final. Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy free gift (gift = freely given) past history (history is always in the past) Click for next  Happy Birthday! That will be $20.00 please. Santa Claus gives me free gifts. Avoid Redundancy Redundancy : Avoid Redundancy Redundancy unexpected surprise (does this even need explanation?) sudden crisis (crisis implies a sudden occurrence) Click for next  $5 million winner WOW! I never expected to win! $5 million winner Right on time, as expected. I prefer a gradual crisis. Redundant Categories: Redundant Categories Some words imply their general categories, so we don't have to state both. For example, we already know that pink is a color and that shiny is an appearance . Click for next  Redundant Categories: Redundant Categories large in size (“large” is a size) red in color (“red” is a color) AVOID the following: Red in color Click for next  Redundant Categories: Redundant Categories often times (“ often ” already describes time) heavy in weight (“ heavy ” is a weight) AVOID the following: Click for next  Heavy in weight Redundant Categories: Redundant Categories at an early time (“early” describes time) economics field (economics is a field) AVOID the following: Early time Economics Click for next  Redundant Categories : Redundant Categories round in shape (“round” is a shape) of cheap quality (“cheap” denotes quality) AVOID the following : in shape Round Just cheap ! Click for next  Redundant Categories : Redundant Categories in a confused state (confusion is a state of mind) unusual in nature (“unusual” describes the nature of something) AVOID the following : Just confused ! Just unusual ! Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #8 … It’s easy as pie to be wordy when using CLICHES! Easy Click for next  Clichés : Clichés Seriously, avoid using cliches ! Clichés are common , and that's exactly the reason you should avoid them . Click for next  Clichés : Clichés Think about this: when you hear somebody say , “ You can’t teach an old dog new tricks " do you ever visualize the image? Click for next  Clichés : Clichés Probably not. You probably do not visualize an old dog ignoring someone trying to teach a new trick. You have heard the expression so many times that it means very little anymore. I might be able to learn a new trick… Click for next  Clichés : Clichés Avoid clichés! Beginning writers often mistakenly think that clichés make their writing sound more " literary ," more creative , or more original . I know…I’ll say I was happy as a clam and felt like a million bucks because I decided to be myself. Click for next  Clichés : Clichés Avoid clichés! However , clichés have just the opposite effect . They are worn-out expressions that have lost their vitality from overuse , and they are one sign of weak writing . Sheesh …not another happy clam!!! Click for next  How to be WORDY: How to be WORDY Step #9 … Add intensifiers “ very ” “ really ” and “ extremely ” to everything! Very, really, and extremely strong!! Click for next  Use intense words, not intensifiers: Use intense words, not intensifiers Seriously …avoid “ very ” “ really ” and “ extremely ” Click for next  Very, really, extremely are “ leeches that infest the pond of prose . ” George Orwell Use intense words, not intensifiers: Use intense words, not intensifiers Avoid “ very ” “ really ” and “ extremely ” Rather than enhancing words, these words actually bleed meaning away . very happy happy Click for next  Use intense words, not intensifiers: Use intense words, not intensifiers very (as in “ very interesting") quite (as in " quite appetizing") little (as in "a little tired") pretty (as in " pretty good") really (" really impressive") Examples of what NOT to write: Click for next  Remember…Description = : Remember…Description = … better , stronger words NOT more words! Click for next  One final point…: One final point… Sometimes you need a lot of words. A sentence is not "wordy" just because it is long. Click for next  Effective writing: Effective writing A sentence can be long and concise . You want to avoid unnecessary words in your writing. Click for next  The best writing is vivid and concise…: The best writing is vivid and concise… End of presentation .

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