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Sentence Clarity and Combining:  Sentence Clarity and Combining A workshop brought to you by The Purdue University Writing Lab Sentence Clarity:  Sentence Clarity Why do we need to be concerned with sentence clarity? To communicate effectively to the reader To make writing persuasive To show credibility and authority as a writer Common clarity problems:  Common clarity problems Misplaced modifiers Dangling modifiers Passive voice Misplaced Modifiers:  Misplaced Modifiers a word or phrase that causes confusion because it is located within a sentence so far away from the word(s) to which it refers Misplaced Modifiers:  Misplaced Modifiers Consider the different meanings in the following sentences: The dog under the tree bit Carrie. vs. The dog bit Carrie under the tree. Misplaced Modifiers:  Misplaced Modifiers Sometimes misplaced modifiers are used for comic effect: The other day I shot an elephant in my pajamas. How he got in my pajamas I'll never know. -- Groucho Marx How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? Jennifer called her adorable kitten opening the can of tuna and filled the food bowl. Better: Opening the can of tuna, Jennifer called her adorable kitten and filled the food bowl. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? Portia rushed to the store loaded with cash to buy the birthday gift. Better: Portia, loaded with cash, rushed to the store to buy the birthday gift. Misplaced Modifiers:  Misplaced Modifiers Some one-word modifiers often cause confusion: almost just nearly simply even hardly merely only Explain the meaning of each sentence::  Explain the meaning of each sentence: Almost everyone in the class passed the calculus exam. Everyone in the class almost passed the calculus exam. Which sentence indicates that everyone in the class failed the exam? Explain the meaning of each sentence::  Explain the meaning of each sentence: John nearly earned $100. John earned nearly $100. Which sentence indicates that John earned some money? Dangling modifiers:  Dangling modifiers a word or phrase that modifies another word or phrase that has not been stated clearly within the sentence often occur at the beginnings and ends of sentences often indicated by an -ing verb or a to + verb phrase Dangling modifiers:  Dangling modifiers Having finished dinner, the football game was turned on. Having finished dinner, Joe turned on the football game. Dangling modifiers can be repaired by::  Dangling modifiers can be repaired by: placing the subject of the modification phrase as the subject of the independent clause: Having finished dinner, Joe turned on the football game. placing the subject of the action within the dangling phrase: After Joe finished dinner, he turned on the football game. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? Playing solitaire on the computer for three hours, Michael’s paper was not completed. Better: Playing solitaire on the computer for three hours, Michael did not complete his paper. Better: Because Michael played solitaire on the computer for three hours, he did not complete his paper. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? Locked away in the old chest, Richard was surprised by the antique hats. Better: Locked away in the old chest, the antique hats surprised Richard. Better: The antique hats locked away in the old chest surprised Richard. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? To work as a loan officer, an education in financial planning is required. Better: To work as a loan officer, one is required to have an education in financial planning. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? Being a process that still needs to be refined, scientists are searching for a more effective plan for chemotherapy treatment. Better: Scientists are searching for a more effective plan for chemotherapy treatment, a process that still needs to be refined. Passive Voice:  Passive Voice indicates what is receiving the action rather than explaining who is doing the action two indicators "to be" verbs—is, are, was, were "by ________” Examples: Mistakes were made. The cats were brushed by Laura. How might you improve the following sentence?:  How might you improve the following sentence? The decision that was reached by the committee was to postpone the vote. Better: The committee reached the decision to postpone the vote. Best: The committee decided to postpone the vote. How might you correct the following sentence?:  How might you correct the following sentence? The disk drive of the computer was damaged by the electrical surge. Better: The electrical surge damaged the disk drive of the computer. Best: The electrical surge damaged the computer's disk drive. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining Why should we know about sentence combining? To build clarity To avoid wordiness To avoid redundancy Keys to sentence combining: Create adjectives Create properly placed modifying clauses Eliminate unnecessary or repetitive phrases Consider the following paragraph::  Consider the following paragraph: The boy struggled to ride his bike. The boy is four years old and he is feisty. The bike is new and it is a light blue color. The boy received the bike for his birthday. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining The boy struggled to ride his bike. The boy is four years old and he is feisty. The bike is new and it is a light blue color. The boy received the bike for his birthday. He struggled for two hours. However, he was unsuccessful in riding the bike. The feisty four-year-old boy struggled unsuccessfully for two hours to ride his new light blue birthday bike. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining The animal trainer dove into the pool. The trainer was skilled and athletic. She was excited when she dove into the pool. She swam with two dolphins. The dolphins were babies. The dolphins were playful. The trainer swam with the dolphins for over an hour. When the trainer swam with the dolphins, she was happy. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining The animal trainer dove into the pool. The trainer was skilled and athletic. She was excited when she dove into the pool. She swam with two dolphins. The dolphins were babies. The dolphins were playful. The trainer swam with the dolphins for over an hour. When the trainer swam with the dolphins, she was happy. The skilled, athletic animal trainer excitedly dove into the pool and happily swam for over an hour with two playful baby dolphins. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining The blizzard contained strong winds and heavy snow. During the snowstorm, the roof of the town library collapsed. The roof of the post office did the same. The blowing snow covered the county roads. Schools cancelled classes due to the white-out conditions. Sentence Combining:  Sentence Combining The blizzard contained strong winds and heavy snow. During the snowstorm, the roof of the town library collapsed. The roof of the post office did the same. The blowing snow covered the county roads. Schools cancelled classes due to the white-out conditions. The blizzard, containing strong winds and heavy snow, caused the roofs of the town library and the post office to collapse, created white-out conditions on county roads, and forced schools to cancel classes. Where can you go for additional help with sentence clarity?:  Where can you go for additional help with sentence clarity? Purdue University Writing Lab Heavilon 226 Grammar Hotline: (765) 494-3723 Check our web site: http://owl.english.purdue.edu Email brief questions: [email protected] Purdue University Writing Lab

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